Sare Agama

Ohmygoshohmygoshohmygosh! People who actually like Harvest Moon! I have loved this series since I was five. PG13 for maybe kissing and maybe the word crap or something. "I understand, Mom. ...

Once again, you are mixing the view points. You are also putting the wrong... how shall I say... word? For example: Aslan let go of the wolf that was trap ...

Hey Night Mistress! Glad to see a Narnia piece! *Covers eyes* You have a lot of grammar errors. She-beaver fuss with her fur. Beaver noticed this Doesn't she have a ...

Hey, nice job! Have you joined the Warriors group here? You can post your story there and get a couple of critiques from fellow Warrior lovers. *Like me* Anyway, there ...

More please? I don't think they have ceromonies for kits anyway... To have such a cat as my frined. You misspelled friend. :wink: I don't think you should have this ...

Take out the s. As if her voice had been a summons Here, you have it in third person view, yet in part two, you have it in first person... ...

No. Oh, and you messed up with your italics and such... oh, and one more thing. At first, you tried to make the names larger. [size=large]Crescentblaze[/size] later on, however, you ...

Wow, you have a good writing style. A few things I noticed... we would need to move to a totally new country. You should probably remove the 'totally.' I think ...

I'd like it a little more if you told us what happened to the wife... All of a sudden, he still loves her, and she doesn't love him. Do they ...

Wow. It made me too, feel like it was written by a senior citizen. Can we send this to the White House? XD Our dreams are now resounding, As our ...

Wow, that was so sad. :cry: You are very good at this. It made me feel the pain you were going through. congrats! 2008 Vincent Cuccolo Is that your signature? ...

Okay, two things. One, you never consulted me on whether or not to post this. Two, why is Ottertail being banned? You never told us in the story. I think ...

I think it is a GREAT piece, and it is a clear example of a soldiers life. Although, I noticed that in all of the lines, there was a dash ...

The cliff-like rock formation was arranged in a crescent half-circle, facing them. I think you should either take out crescent or half-circle. You should probably say The cliff-like rock formation ...

I just noticed something. Sunpaw turned and headed for the entrance to Camp. Camp should be lower cased. :D Just wanted to point that out. -ClimberSquirrel